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climbing 208 feet up the ruin wall

By porpentine

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CategoryRankScoreCount
Humor253.86
Mood164.14
Coolness351
Overall1053.76
Theme1813.97
Innovation3363.41
Fun3423.22
Graphics5693.00
Audio10311.53

Comments

misandry 2013-04-29 03:41

loved this!

cherrynukacola 2013-04-29 03:58

Ha ha ha- that was great! Really loved it - so many great little moments.

mcc 2013-04-29 04:25

This game is of unusual difficulty for me because the trackpad on my laptop is broken, such that I must exert great physical force for any one click to register. (Most people who try to use my computer can't even pull off a single click.) When clicking on like one thing or two this is negligible, but when clicking something repeatedly it becomes noticeable and then very seriously hampering

My broken hardware caused the physical process of playing this game to become basically the same as what its narrative described

Every hand up further exhausting my tired arms

Not certain I can physically make it

deathray 2013-04-29 04:50

I just speed-clicked through the Climb link and I won.

nxsverigmail-com 2013-04-29 04:55

That was fantastic! I'll admit I skipped some vines in the beginning, but the "picture in time" story and the humor was excellent. Definitely fits the theme. Admittedly not something I'd play more than once, but still memorable. Cheers!

stustuthebloo 2013-04-29 05:02

Very nice. Felt a bit drawn out in places but I guess that's the point. I liked a lot of the ramblings.

thristhart 2013-04-29 05:04

I wasn't expecting long-distance relationship feels from this game D:

amazingly atmospheric as always

bloogloo 2013-04-29 05:35

lol, that was pretty minimal

leafo 2013-04-29 05:47

This game is awesome

felix20 2013-04-29 06:04

This was great. Love the narrative. A very nice take on the theme.

MattHartley 2013-04-29 06:12

Amazing! Your my favorite

hypothete 2013-04-29 06:38

Really enjoyed playing through this, it did a good job of drawing out emotion while being self reflexive.

cdbuckmaster 2013-04-29 13:34

I loved this, the writing style really took advantage of using Twine to tell stories.

fabienporee 2013-04-29 13:36

I pissed myself so I could buy a church.

bummzack 2013-04-29 15:25

Great game. I like it a lot.

ragzouken 2013-04-29 16:00

Really enjoyed the pace this forced me into.

chrstphrschulte 2013-04-29 18:48

Wow that was great. Something I found particularly fantastic was that, as in the writing, I eventually forgot that I was climbing and was only reminded of it when I was reminded of it in game. It really immersed me in the role. I was laughing out loud as well, wonderful writing. I also liked that, while the narrative was really nuanced, I viewed the images as a straight binary distinction (climbing and green, or at the top and blue); this was a very neat contrast. Great work!

arrowthefighter 2013-04-29 19:37

that was awesome

sampotasz 2013-04-29 20:14

love love love. so fucking Porpentine it's amazing. which is to say, "voice"

kratorspore 2013-04-29 20:31

Wonderful turns of phrase in this game. Lovely work. I liked how the game pulled me into its pacing.

preordercancelled 2013-04-30 01:44

It kept going and going - way longer than I expected.

It's so simple, but there's a lot of dialog. Talented writing.

ryusui 2013-04-30 05:32

Loved it. Nice Twine trickery, too - how do you disable backtracking and get those neat little "rotating menu option"-type choices?

lamia-queenz 2013-04-30 06:06

i've collected all twine resources i know of here: http://aliendovecote.com/?page_id=4047

i used "eliminate the back functionality in Sugarcane" and <<cyclinglink>> for the two you mentioned

leon arnott in particular has contributed to twine's vocabulary immensely with his macros

matthias_zarzecki 2013-04-30 08:40

Nice idea to simulate!

niallm 2013-04-30 10:07

This is fantastic :)

Jeremias 2013-04-30 18:54

I like how you go into details of the climber's thinking and how his thoughts appear authentic. Liked it! (but a bit too long :D)

alvivar 2013-04-30 22:18

in my mind i was naked all the ride.

paulmcgg 2013-04-30 22:39

Wow, fantastic storytelling, loved how the details slipped in. Great use of theme and really evocative.

Also I admit I googled and listen to Janet Jackson to accompany the end. Also yay for making playlist, always love this.

jackspinoza 2013-05-01 00:50

lots to like here, it really drew me in in a dream or fever kind of way. At one point I started genuinely fretting for my loot and wondering if I could hold on. I wonder if the writing could be tightened up though. The gorillas were a particular highlight for me, inspired. good stuff.

grimfang4 2013-05-02 01:34

Pretty sweet. You should recommend the music first, then we can listen while we climb. :)

kgs0142 2013-05-02 03:37

You truly are a good story teller lol.
All the text and button text is awesome.
Good job! :D

megabrutal 2013-05-03 03:18

Great text, quite psychedelic; that's why you get 5 for Mood. ;)

brighterorange 2013-05-03 20:19

This is good. It can only hang together on the strength of its writing, which it does. There were some minor graphical glitches (redrawing when climbing higher) that were a little distracting. I liked and identified with the story, especially the part about peeing my pants.

maple 2013-05-04 09:41

This brought back lots of little memories, which was... negative in some ways, and positive in other ways.

With squashing the mosquito, once my arm was gushing blood, and the only thing nearby me to clean it up and stuff was my white shirt, so I took it off and used it to stop the blood, and when it was tame I unscrunched it and almost didn't wash it straight away so that it would stain, cause I thought it looked cool. Then the phone call brought back relationship things and etc. etc. So yeah. I dunno what to say. It was an interesting journey up the wall.

I almost expected that I would fall off the wall to my death near the top, or that I would verbally realise that I was near the top before I got there.

GreyShock 2013-05-04 10:33

Woah, I really felt like climbing every ft. Loved the mood and the feeling of choice at some points. Hyper minimalistic, cograts :P

diamonde 2013-05-05 12:47

I enjoyed this more than I expected! :)

Cracked up when reading "wiggle your tongue to attract a small bird" :D

andrewshouldice 2013-05-06 13:50

Great work. I was enthralled.

snoringfrog 2013-05-09 07:27

Loved this. Very interesting, despite being mostly linear. Very nice way to read that story. Awesome stuff.

kirby_freak 2013-05-13 15:24

At first I was like, "Aw man, not another word game thing". But I played it, and really enjoyed it! You had me laughing out loud at some points, and some other points were great reflective moments. From one RPSer to another, great job. (Nice pixel art btw!)

ohsqueezy 2013-05-14 16:52

Funny, surreal and intense! I like that it has an encouraging message despite obvious opportunities to kill or maim the player.

christian-s 2013-05-18 07:36

Beautiful pixel art!

vdz 2013-05-19 17:19

Very immersive, though around the 100 feet mark it starts to lose its dramatic atmosphere somewhat. Around 50 feet I was thinking, 'oh man, I'll never make it', but after 100 there wasn't really much tension anymore; some 'oh shit I'm not going to make it' lines between the distractions would've really helped there. It isn't until you get near the top that it gets dramatic again.

There is one thing that bothers me, though. WHAT THE HELL IS AT THE TOP OF THE WALL?! I climbed 208 feet up the wall, completely destroyed my hands in the process, lost all of my loot, caught malaria and pissed myself, and I don't even get to see the reason I put in all of that effort! What is it that's up there that made it worth the effort to climb 208 freaking feet riskily using vines that are barely strong enough to hold me with a heavy backpack?! I'm fine with anticlimactic endings (such as not making it, not finding what you expected, etc), but cutting it off at that point was just mean.

porpentine 2013-05-19 19:18

at 95 feet it clearly states that your helicopter is at the top of the wall

vdz 2013-05-19 19:33

Ah, looks like I completely misread that sentence; I thought he was saying his helicopter is somewhat far away on the other side of the wall because he couldn't land close to the tomb.

porpentine 2013-05-19 19:36

she*

why do people assume it's a he, there's multiple instances of textual evidence hinting at her gender

vdz 2013-05-19 21:47

Hm, I guess I'll explain how I initially interpreted various things and why I experienced things the way I did. This is going to be embarrassing and stupid, but I hope it helps.

Let's start off with the choices. I originally felt the clickable text were actions you could do, and that they may affect how the story progresses; a link not clicked meaning an action not taken. For this reason, I usually ignored the sidetracking actions to focus on climbing unless they were relevant for climbing or very interesting, lest I do something stupid and fall and/or wear myself out before I reach the top. It took a very long time for me to realize that these actions would be done regardless of whether I clicked them or not - clicking was only for expanding the text. Because I was avoiding 'unnecessary actions', I also missed how you could change the action you were about to take by clicking the word at times (these moments were indistinguishable from text expansion moments until you click the text); only near the end of the game did I understand how that worked.

The story: I didn't know the opening lines were meant to be taken literally, as they have a lot of implied context I didn't know about beforehand (the game has no description, so I had no idea what the game was about until I tried it). As such, I interpreted it as a cryptic intro text (which is quite common in many stories; my interpretation could be blamed on the fact that I'm currently reading Shikkoku no Sharnoth, which is absolutely full of this kind of stuff) which would make sense later.
As the climb began, I had the impression (partially based on the title) that the protagonist was climbing the wall of a ruin he [as I interpreted the protagonist at the time] was about to loot stuff from (and therefore I was wondering why I hadn't left my backpack behind before starting the climb). As the story progressed, at first I was thinking 'it sucks that there's no choice to go back, this isn't going to end well', which gradually shifted towards 'the treasure at the top better be worth it'.

Regarding the protagonist, considering the context (treasure hunter climbing the wall of a [probably ancient] ruin), I was reminded of characters like Indiana Jones and various old video game characters from such contexts (most inspired by Indiana Jones). All of these characters are male, and as it was from a first-person perspective, I am male myself, and there was no clear indication otherwise, I thought the protagonist was a male treasure hunter in his late 20s-early 30s, as that fit the clichés/conventions. Re-playing the game, I found that the only non-optional hints towards her gender were:
"You envision piles of Sephora cosmetics. White tiles. Glass case. 20 percent off fine jewelry.
Career Woman Khaki package with Ocean Mist Underarm Dab for midday refresh.
You can smell the fabric. See the tags strewn across the dressing room floor."
As I am not American, I had no idea what 'JC Penny' was; I thought the protagonist was distracting 'himself' from the pain by thinking random thoughts as some psychological trick.

As you can see, I misinterpreted various things in the story. It always happens with stories; anything not told clearly is filled in by whatever preconceptions the reader has. If it was your intention to make certain parts clearer to readers, I hope this helps to understand where it can go wrong in readers' minds.

adventureislands 2013-05-20 20:25

Pretty interesting story, I liked it.

christina-nordlander 2013-05-20 21:52

Low on interactivity for a Twine game, but awe-inspiring in terms of writing and mood. (Of course, that's hardly unexpected for Porpentine.) Now that I think about it, I see how the incessant clicking mimics the protagonist's effort of climbing.

Nice use of graphics, too.

davidpeter 2013-05-20 22:38

dat feel. I enjoyed that you could select from different choices, but there's no way I'm going back through that!

This sort of reminded me of those websites with the 10,000 alert windows. I actually never minded those.