danguri-cat 2023-05-02 00:27
Love the art!
Foon → Ludum Dare Explorer → LD53 → Message to the End
By edenic666
| Category | Rank | Score | Count | |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| Overall | 773 | 3.40 | 23 | |
| Fun | 924 | 3.04 | 24 | |
| Innovation | 657 | 3.26 | 23 | |
| Theme | 532 | 3.95 | 25 | |
| Graphics | 237 | 4.20 | 26 | |
| Audio | 1.83 | 5 | ||
| Humor | 956 | 2.38 | 19 | |
| Mood | 485 | 3.64 | 26 |
Love the art!
I am not sure what the game was, I quit after about 45 seconds.
i LOVE this art, the elephant, the crazy hair of the girl and the backgrounds in a paint oil style. Hope you add the sound soon because it will blow :)
I love the aesthetic and good on you for finishing! It's very impressive that this is your first Ludum Dare, and I think you should be proud!
This was so fun! I appreciate how much work you put into the visuals and all the different art pieces!
When she looked at the letter and where it was addressed to I literally got chills :) Such a sick way to start a VN. Keep it up!!
good art and history, some kind of fairy tale or something like that but a didn't heard any sound :( idk why. and the text below is hard to see, it seems to merge with the background, it needs to be brighter or darker photo_2023-05-02_04-05-11.jpg
anyway looks good! :)
Hermes is so cute!
Really beautiful art in such a short time! The game was alot depper than I expected and I played it through again and chose the other option so see the difference!
大象很可爱，画功很棒，整体的视觉体验都很舒服~！
Wow! The art is so incredible. I'm genuinely impressed how much you were able to make for the jam. I also love the work you've put into your characters. This had a lot more depth than I was expecting. Really nice work.
great art but I was kinda confused as to what was going on and when the game started becoming so depressing all of the sudden, I kinda felt like I completely lost touch witht the game. Maybe we listening to https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IaqPAIPNyt8&list=RDIaqPAIPNyt8&start_radio=1 while playing ruined the intended mood but still, I feel like proper anticipation and a slightly more toned down response from the deliverant (maybe more shock with the existential crisis being a bit more subtle) would've made for a better experience.
Very nice visuals!I am not really a fan of visual novels but props for addingg options and so much stuff for so little time!
Being up to date on FFXIV, I see a lot of inspiration drawn from Elpis and Meteion. That's actually what initially drew me to try it. The game has a resolution which isn't something you always see in a game Jam so good on you for that. The art was nice and although visual novels aren't usually my thing, it was entertaining enough.
@damyannov omg yes meteion and endwalker as a whole was DEFINITELY a big thing in my mind while I was making this!! thank you so much for playing<3
The visual design is absolutely stunning and really drew me into the the story. Characters are well-written and engaging, I was left wondering what happened to Postman arter - got really attached to her) Speaking of the story, I found it to be truly inspiring, with a strong sense of fate and purpose that left a lasting impression on me. Overall, this game was a standout experience and I thoroughly enjoyed playing it. Great job to the developers for creating such a memorable title!
Cool art, love it!
Very beautiful art, I like it!
Fellow FF14 enjoyer :handshake: the art and the story were lovely, i wish it had been even longer. well done!
Great art style! I wish I could draw like that.
First of all, congrats on finishing your first Ludum Dare!
It's not a genre of VN that I usually read, so the amount of interesting food for thought that this VN provided me came as a (very welcome) surprise. Maybe it's because, with the introduction of Hermes, the game communicated early on that my brain should get ready to suspend its disbelief. Whatever the reason, it made it feel like most of the many unanswered questions I had were deliberately left that way as to not distract from the overall message of the VN (rather than being a consequence of the game jam's time limit - which I'm sure was part of the equation here). It made me want to speculate about the answers rather than question the narrative, which is rather unusual for me.
For example, I was wondering why the postman doesn't have a name when their companion, Hermes, does. One obvious reason might be that finding a name would've taken too much time (in which case I can recommend behindthename.org for inspriation - that's what I usually use), but after the game answered another question of mine about whether the postman is actually human (my interpretation of "My whole life i've just been making people so sad." is that they aren't), it kind of made sense to refer to them by what they do rather than by a name. Some questions that I haven't found a clear answer to are: - I'm assuming that most if not all letters are created by humans since they seem to involve interpersonal relationships. But then why does the postman treat the letters as something personal to themself? - Why would there need to be a specific entity for postman's job? (Ig people have created deities for specific purposes like this in the past - take Hermes for instance - so that might be enough of an explanation.)
I do also have some constructive criticism: - I really enjoyed the idea of having lined paper for the textboxes! However, it bugged me that the second line of text didn't line up with the second line of the paper ^^;; - A pet peeve of mine: please, don't write ellipses (...) with only two periods. I do think that there are situations and settings in which they make sense, but this is not one of them imho. Since the textbox is framed as a letter head, and the letters of this story are considered life-changing, I find it unlikely that they would contain time-saving abbreviations like these. If the game was about text messages or forum posts, I wouldn't mind them, but in this kind of situation they feel... maybe not unprofessional, but definitely messy. - When the postman speaks to Space, they make a valid argument in asking whether the sadness that their letters may bring is desirable, to which Space only replies that the postman did save the Lost Girl so it doesn't matter. But that was just a coincidence, so postman's argument still stands. It makes me think that Space was gaslighting the postman with that answer, which... I don't think that's what I should've taken away from that conversation(?) It also made the overall message of the VN a little less clear. (I'm assuming the message is either "Life is beautiful - that doesn't mean it's always easy, though." or "Trying times ask for caring friends." or both - I hope I'm not too far off the mark here.)
Nice job on your first entry! It looks really cute, I love the art style <3
Thank you everyone for all your feedback and kind words I appreciate it all so much! I'm so so glad you all enjoyed playing it as much as I enjoyed making it! And thank you especially for all the kind comments on the art because I worked so hard on it!
@luxiffre Thank you for all the feedback especially, it genuinely does mean a lot to me! I also wish I could've lined up the paper a bit better >.> but that's definitely a work on this in the future thing... And yeah! That final conversation was very... tough for me to write, mostly just because I'm not a writer hehe. But yeah, I had an idea of how I wanted it to go but couldn't pinpoint the exact words I wanted and looking back it does seem very gaslighty >.>
And actually fun fact about the postman's name! I was initially planning on giving them one, however once I got to the end with the thank you note I thought that it might be i don't know.. better if they just didn't have one? Yeah they're definitely not human (who knows what they are because I surely don't) so I figured to them a name wouldn't matter TOO too much as long as they can be referred to as something.
Honestly I didn't think much of it at the time but this is surely a character/concept I'd love to expand on! Definitely give backstory to the lost girl and her letter and maybe on other letters the postman delivered- and our postman's beginnings!
Once again, thank you everyone for the feedback and sweet sweet words, you're all the best!! And you're all very much inspiring me to continue making games hehe
It's not my type of game but it's really well made. Good job!