Foon → Ludum Dare Explorer → LD54 → STARCHILD
By konfekt
| Category | Rank | Score | Count | |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| Overall | 34 | |||
| Fun | 33 | |||
| Innovation | 33 | |||
| Theme | 34 | |||
| Graphics | 32 | |||
| Audio | 15 | |||
| Humor | 3 | |||
| Mood | 34 |
I like the interactive story idea. I think it might be cool if there were a couple options in each prompt to allow the player to explore the story on their terms more. Also I think music would go along way in this one since its mostly text.
Loved your story telling, I experienced multiple endings myself! Great Work :heartbeat:
Wow, the game is so cute and so sad at the same time. I loved. I only saw one of the endings, and I think it was the sad ending, lol. I hope to see the other endings. Congratulations on the game, it was very beautiful and touching.
The writting in this game was really something, got me quite involved and after all, sad. I really liked the way the gameplay creates a rithm to the story that makes everything feel a lot more poetic and lonely. Really cool idea! Congrats for the entry, and nice work!
Short but beautiful. I got three different endings. I wish nothing but the best for these two, whichever outcome they reach~ <3
Cute story. Thank you for sharing it
Really cute story, nice writing!
I enjoyed your writing and the little sketches! Nice Job ^_^
Great writing , kinda feels short , but I like it
A very interesting entry. Modest in scope, yet ambitious in storytelling. I've only explored one ending, but I've been intrigued by the way you told the story.
Was there supposed to be any audio? I see you have the rating category, but I couldn't hear anything, and I'm afraid that might have detracted from the atmosphere :(
I liked how buttons are implemented into the text, though this game lacks audio and I guess it isn't connected to theme of the jam. Overall, nice little story.
@ditam You're right, I forgot to disable the audio rating! Thanks for pointing that out. To be honest I'm not sure if the program I used supports audio so I wasn't able to add any, but I agree it would have improved the atmosphere. I'll try to keep this in mind for future entries!
@bobafett89 I agree, audio definitely could have elevated the story! Regarding the theme, I did intend for it to be about limited space. I interpreted limited space = limited ways to be and express yourself. And then more literally, the Starchild isn't able to explore "space"(= the cosmos) as freely as the others. However this is more implied so I completely understand that you saw it as unconnected to the theme.
What a great story! Great work and an interesting interpretation of the theme! It would've been nice to see some graphics besides the text and to have the option to choose, but it is good enough as it is!
Love the story and sketches, the story is concise but deep enough. Still, i think the game could bring more mood if there were some kind of artwork throughout the story line and some background music for the atmosphere. Overall, this is a very cute game and has some potential to be a real visual novel game based on this story line...
This was a nice little story, it felt very emotional. Well done!
@terminalgoat Thank you for saying it has the potential to be a real VN! I'm not sure whether I want to rework this game with a longer story, art & some music or just focus on other projects, but either way it's very motivating to hear :)
lovely! poetic and emotional, I enjoyed it. also, I thought it was interesting with selecting different words and navigating that way, brings a good flow without having to think hard about which one to pick, instead, it's like intuition guides you. well done!!
I played enough to get a couple endings, both of them sad. The depression allegory stuck touched me. My only criticism is that it'd be nice to be able to start later in the story so you don't have to keep reading the paragraphs with only one choice. I don't know if that's possible with Ramus though.