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Harrr-vest

By jaj

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CategoryRankScoreCount
Overall2573.7121
Fun2763.5721
Innovation4593.2121
Theme5083.5221
Humor244.2621
Mood1523.8921

Comments

stormharrier 2023-01-10 14:36

I got the secret ending! Eventually...

I enjoyed that. It was funny and emotional, and an interesting take on the theme! Nice choice of music too.

digital-bacon 2023-01-11 11:37

Giggled when I first saw the name and the thumbnail :laughing: Loved the graphics, the jaunty sea-shanty like music and the story. Very well done!

hexyvexy 2023-01-11 11:44

A cute concept, and I love a pun, but I felt the implementation of the concept was a little lacking, in that the court scene could have been more dynamic and involved. That said I'm not a fan of CYOA/VN so that's probably personal bias.

jaj 2023-01-11 11:50

Thanks for the feedback and compliments! @stormharrier I'm so glad someone got to the secret ending :D

frogravity 2023-01-11 12:01

Amazing game! I loved the premise, and the dialogue was hilarious. The secret ending was also very cool and unexpected - I loved how you managed to turn a ridiculous concept into an emotional story, and the foreshadowing for it was excellent. It was a bit annoying to restart the entire game each time, though - I found myself skipping a lot of the dialogue in subsequent playthroughs, and sometimes missed the new parts because of that - and the web build didn't work on Firefox for some reason, but otherwise, great entry!

jaj 2023-01-11 12:12

@frogman Thank you for playing through the secret ending! I was unaware the game didn't run in firefox, I'm actually pretty new to exporting in unity.

I think for an update save states are a must. I'll look into how to do that!

xhadie 2023-01-11 15:02

Intersting story! The atmosphere was well established and engaging. The ending was somehow abrupt. All in all, a solid entry - well done! :)

exofrenon 2023-01-11 23:24

When I saw the game's title in the thumbnail I immediately had to click on it due to how stupid the pun was, and I was pleasantly surprised to see a visual novel in Ludum Dare. They are not that popular here.

I liked the writing and I found the premise hilarious and cute at the same time. The dialogue was realistic, as if this really happened to you. Solid implementation of a VN, no bugs or issues encountered. Unfortunately I couldn't find the secret ending. I though I would be bored, but I finished it before I knew it.

Good job overall.

noskire 2023-01-11 23:28

Congrats on thinking outside the box! Very fun game! :laughing:

cutesquirrel 2023-01-11 23:33

Lovely story, good music, and generally well executed. Though I missed a 'prev sentence' button, as I miss clicked a couple of times. I like the questioning in the court, making it way more interactive than most visual novels. The theme is.. stretched, to say the least. But good entry.

duncan-3 2023-01-11 23:39

best interpretation of the theme

doctor-zeus 2023-01-12 06:58

Nice job! The writing was definitely the highlight, it made this little family episode believable. Humor and emotion came through well for me, and I especially like how the secret ending brought all of the different pieces of the story together.

Actually traversing the game's dialogue tree was a bit of a pain, though - I also accidentally ran through some new dialogue once when I didn't realize I'd triggered an extra question in the second half, and I had to do plenty of page refreshing to try to scour the game for that secret ending.

I enjoyed playing through it, but quality-of-life upgrades for saving / loading states and restarting the game after it's over would be very nice. I can appreciate that those technical bits can be a lot of work on the backend, though, so I understand that the time constraints of the jam make balancing priorities tricky.

I think that the time put toward the story, music, branching paths, and general presentation was all very well spent, thanks for putting together a fun (and definitely outside-of-the-box!) submission for the jam!

jaj 2023-01-12 16:46

@doctor-zeus @cutesquirrel @exofrenon Thank you for the feedback and compliments! This was my first VN, but I enjoyed making it a lot so I'll definitely look into a previous line button and/or savestate system to make replaying easier. Also to use for possible future VN's!

@duncan-3 @noskire Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

@xhadie thank you :). The two normal endings are pretty abrupt, and the game is still missing a proper ending screen.

secrt101 2023-01-13 05:40

as others have said, a save function to start from a certain spot would really help. Loved the art and found it refreshing to see a VN! Great writing, I found it funny and entertaining. Amazing job!

pazzi 2023-01-14 06:54

Brilliant. The dialogue, feels real and unpredictable at the same time- I'm at a loss....brilliant! ^~^

nbumgardner 2023-01-20 06:13

I am very glad someone made this pun!

Adding a way to reset would be nice to save on load times from refreshing the website. Or maybe show "The End" or something on the screen so the non-secret endings look finished and not like the next scene refused to load.

The writing felt believable to me and I look forward to seeing more of your games in the future.