chobrah 2016-04-18 06:12
A gripping tale :)
Foon → Ludum Dare Explorer → LD35 → Four Horsemen: Chapter 1
By eott
| Category | Rank | Score | Count | |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| Mood | 218 | 3.30 | ||
| Humor | 237 | 2.86 | ||
| Overall | 618 | 3.04 | ||
| Theme | 704 | 2.96 | ||
| Fun | 709 | 2.77 | ||
| Coolness | 1350 | 45 |
A gripping tale :)
Coffee and self-loathing, my favourite!
Interesting, I'd like to see a further development of this. :)
Like the tone. Worth developing further. Shapeshifting choices could work well in a game of this sort.
An interesting story, only slightly let down by some odd phrasing. Good work. :)
it was a good tale, a little long to begin, but fun anyway (cornflakes and water, made me smile)
Interesting take on theme. A fun read.
I enjoy IF games in Ludum Dare. Good use of the theme, you included a couple story paths that hint to playing separate characters, and there are some colorful descriptions that entertain. I do wish you ran your story through a spell checker, but your story came across nonetheless. Good entry!
An interesting take on the theme. Also fairly well written, although I did note some typos here and there. I like your use of metaphor!
Pretty interesting. The ending took me by surprise.
(There was a typo on one of the pages- "...youths across the street. They |look looking| for trouble...")