bumbu 2015-08-25 20:37
Game is stuck on 2nd line of text for me
Foon → Ludum Dare Explorer → LD33 → Monster
By loubyrd
| Category | Rank | Score | Count | |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| Theme | 34 | 4.24 | ||
| Mood | 61 | 4.00 | ||
| Overall | 527 | 3.21 | ||
| Innovation | 915 | 2.45 | ||
| Humor | 944 | 1.33 | ||
| Fun | 1026 | 2.29 | ||
| Coolness | 1842 | 33 |
Game is stuck on 2nd line of text for me
*claps* Wonderful writing, story and mood with the black and grey palette. Gosh! I love text adventures just because of games like these
It's always amazing to me how even the simplest of stories/games can have some of the biggest impacts emotionally on an individual. Great job.
If you wanted to carry this further, I think it could be cool to have the story intermixed with some gameplay. Just an idea.
Pretty dark stuff! More of a narrative than a game, but I like how you structured the story.
Really brave piece. Very, very uncomfortable to play through. You dwelt upon the subject matter so lightly and so unforgivingly. It's hard to compliment you on something that upset me so much, but I'm pretty sure that was the point, so well done.
Uncomfortable and definitely for mature audiences only, and not in the "he says the f-word a lot-mature" sense. A surprising entry in this LD and certainly very evocative and the most real-world interpretation of the theme I've seen so far and will likely see. Damn.
Thanks for letting us play your game!
What I liked:
Great atmosphere, really liked the detached, sometimes Patrick Bateman-like internal thoughts of the main character.
Liked the minimalist visual aesthetic as well and you interpretation of the theme.
Areas to develop:
Some typos and grammatical bits, which took me out of the story (but only a little bit).
Congratulations! Well done!
Well exploited theme ! Maybe more choices would have been better, but the mood was here.
Damn.
It is certainly not fun, but it was really good nonetheless.
Even though english is not your native language and there's a few typo here and there, you did a good job with the story telling. You did not fall into the trap of self-pity and I thank you for that.
Nice game.
The only criticism I would give is that the clickable options should be more visible.
Well, that was disturbing, have mixed feelings about this game.
Well-written text-based game.
Doesnt really meet my conditions of a Game, but the story is great, that's for sure. But again, more of a book than a game.
Very touching!
P.S. I've found a bug (or easter egg?): when the game ends I click at the title, then an ALTERNATIVE NARRATIVE begins... Then it ends, and then starts again the first one, but with purple highlighted text instead of white...
I liked the writting but at some point I stopped. Too much and too dark for one go... save option would be nice
Amazing writing, disturbing but amazing. Bravo.
Cool story, quite unsettling.
I have the same problem as @bumbu, the game is stuck on the 2nd line of text, either on Firefox or Chrome
// SPOILERS AHEAD //
I got angry at the dude that raped my daughter, and that means I beat her? There's one hell of a disconnect between what you've written for the choices and what actually happens.
// END SPOILER //
Apart from that it was mostly well written, but I felt that by the end I kept asking myself which choice you'd arbitrarily made more evil. Well done, kudos.