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1 AM

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CategoryRankScoreCount
Mood184.00
Coolness291
Overall2823.35
Innovation5682.94
Humor6102.15
Theme6313.10
Fun7522.69
Audio9431.41
Graphics11671.59

Comments

l0gical1nsanity 2013-08-26 00:31

Fantastic writing. Really cool idea. I'm gonna go slit my wrists now.

sasoridama 2013-08-26 00:50

Wow that was deep. I like how it seems as though you have choices but you don't.

Ligh7zIncrement 2013-08-26 00:56

Incredibly well written, you created a very believable atmosphere. I tried every path and enjoyed the idea that there was no particular 'win' state. Good job :)

supernours 2013-08-26 01:13

I'm not a fan of text-based games, but it's cool ^^

ravetcofx 2013-08-26 01:17

I love it Great story writing sir!

riley1219 2013-08-26 01:27

Very nice, I loved every moment of it!

thekidder 2013-08-26 02:54

Awesome job. A great use of interactivity to explore a theme, and good writing too.

ravetcofx 2013-08-26 03:02

sorry I had to put one star on graphics and audio :)

tacospice 2013-08-26 03:10

Man, this is some depressing shit. Very well done. And great idea with the 'do it all again' too.

rabbits 2013-08-26 03:28

Great writing skill, I was on the edge of my seat

andrewves 2013-08-26 05:55

I don't usually play purely text based games but i really enjoyed the writing in this.

oldpeculier 2013-08-26 06:22

Terrific. This has got to be one of the most polished and complete games here. Also one of the richest. Thank you for that.

withoutpillow 2013-08-26 09:37

good writing, and like a lot of others said, i really liked the way you could start over and over, but in the end it's not really that simple, and that may not be a bad thing.

g_o 2013-08-26 11:05

A second begins:
OMG THIS IS SO GOOD T_T!!!
WONDERFUL WRITTING!
The idea seemed a bit pretentious at the beginning but then you find that your writting is just epic!
A second ends T_T !

g_o 2013-08-26 11:17

Just one more thing:
Is it me or just like in real life no matter what you say you lose her ? XD Y is this so realistic T_T
Haha good job, try write some more! maybe publish a book one day no kidding, it was a flowing story not too heavy but flowingly moving from lite to heavy it was fantastic <3 it !

paperblurt 2013-08-26 14:17

Some banality to it even though it's good writing.

g_o 2013-08-26 17:01

PaperBlurt: You might be right, but in a game making jam you don't expact to find a pretty well writen story, I mean the story itself might be banal but the way the story is told is quiet good!

You might not believe me but this far this is my favourite entry and it got some damn good score!

g_o 2013-08-26 17:04

LOL now I found the story is kinda real, so no way it's banal, but hi I was right about the fact that it was realistic :D

g_o 2013-08-26 17:06

Brilliant!

chronusz 2013-08-26 17:46

This was probably better written than most of the published books I read. I would've liked for it to have been impacted by my choices (I understand the author doesn't want a "good" ending, but it would've been interesting if the relationship had progressed in different ways and still ended in a break up), but I still enjoyed it thoroughly and maybe teared up a bit upon ending it the first time :)

DarfnageL 2013-08-26 19:26

That was some amazing writing, and considering it is very similar to a situation I'm currently going through, it really hit home.

Lie Down.
Try Not to Cry.
Cry A lot.

spiralcodestudio 2013-08-26 19:38

Wow. That is impressive!

Add some visuals and it could be really entertaining.

psychomonster 2013-08-26 23:36

This is a really cool impression... play so much platformers today (my own platformer too) thta this is a really nice surpirse. I dont't need graphics because my brain is creating the pictures to this story! Thanks 9/10

jupiter_hadley 2013-08-27 00:41

Nice game, Its cool that you have such an in depth story, I included it in my video compilation of LD27 games, if you want to check it out; http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rhxp6zWGaGM

matthewvermaak 2013-08-27 01:00

Well done. I enjoyed that.

zconnelly13 2013-09-03 16:05

I really like it, loved the idea. But the writing, perhaps, could have been a little more succinct. Also I really would have loved some sound effects for the places that you were or the things that you were doing. That would have made the game for me :)

christina-nordlander 2013-09-12 17:28

Not the kind of story I'm usually interested in, but the quality of the writing is very high. One or two sentences felt a bit melodramatic, but that's about the extent of my nitpicking. Time permitting, I'll come back to this to see how the story changes if I make different choices.

A typo: "laying on a threadbare blanket" should be "lying".

canyon 2013-09-15 04:55

Recently I was trying to describe to another game developer, that games are valuable experiences, and that they need not be fun.

This entry is compelling, intriguing and made me ask myself some questions. But it was not fun, and this is not a bad thing.