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Secret Place

By mjamesshort

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CategoryRankScoreCount
Humor3002.79
Mood3153.28
Innovation5753.13
Overall9122.83
Theme10012.48
Fun10152.47
Graphics11502.00
Coolness120449

Comments

crowbeak 2014-08-25 03:49

I liked it, but that font is so very hard to read.

oranebeast 2014-08-25 04:03

I don't know what to say, but it's great you've created a twine game with a.... Twist.

hypnohustla 2014-08-25 06:14

You dirty old man... :D Not a huge fan of Twine games but this was very well written. Great job!

paperblurt 2014-08-25 10:40

Erotica.
Haven't seen that before.
Interesting..

dadman 2014-08-25 11:35

Weirdly enjoyable. Felt a bit like I was stumbling around in confusion with the other person more than everything. I'm curious to see how many places it goes.

xrm0 2014-08-25 13:09

Same as @Crowbeak, the font used makes it difficult to read.

snoother 2014-08-25 23:47

Twine erotica. Quite possibly my favourite niche. There were some really weird, great lines in it -- "early wetness as you melt inside me", "a silent hiss of chemical infatuation". Congrats.

ruthiepee 2014-08-26 01:52

You could probably make an industry out of this game. Love how vague and open it is to interpretation. I didn't have any problem reading the text (in Chrome) so I'm not sure what the other reviewers are talking about.

The word "exist" leads to a blank page though. If that's on purpose-- good job, I think it's poignant and serves its purpose. If it's not on purpose... oh well. It was a game jam. Enjoyed it, thanks for making it!

mjamesshort 2014-08-26 02:26

@Ruthiepee - Glad you enjoyed it! The blank page after "exist",at the end, is on purpose . Thanks for playing!

mjamesshort 2014-08-26 02:27

Thanks Snoother!

franklins-ghost 2014-08-26 10:59

Interesting take on the theme, liked the writing style.

mjamesshort 2014-08-26 14:21

Thanks Franklins Ghost!

buffalophil 2014-08-26 18:50

Needed a smoke after that. I think that it's fair to call you a pioneer in this genre

jnyknn 2014-08-27 13:20

Now I know what it feels like to play a poem...

gnuwind 2014-08-27 13:32

Great job! I like the style of your game and the story.

alexdjones 2014-08-30 00:18

Really interesting twine, I like your writing style a lot.

grooveman 2014-08-31 20:49

It's funny, while the characters (and myself?) are not explained in detail, the sex of characters involved reads really clearly. I'm reminded of Pippin Barr's Hot Coffee, where it turned out that writing erotica or sexual metaphors without clearly attributing sex is actually pretty hard.

I love that you can end the scene on a blank page. It's something that I never considered for a Twine game and it just- /works/, you feel me? Great job.

jupiter_hadley 2014-09-01 00:34

Nice game. I included it in part 13 of my Ludum Dare 30 Compilation video series, if you’d like to check it out :) http://youtu.be/RYkx3DRuabw

mjamesshort 2014-09-05 22:15

Thanks Grooveman!

saschanarr 2014-09-07 20:59

Very interesting style! Liked a lot of the imagery and uses of the dialoges as side-thoughts. I kind of lost the continuity of what was going on once, but other than that I enjoyed the game! Good job!