christophe 2014-04-27 23:50
At the begging I was just clicking not reading just because I wanna a read the final end (so lazy)! But after I realized it looped, I start reading. That was a special experience. It was bewitching.
Foon → Ludum Dare Explorer → LD29 → Beneath the Surface / Warm
By finefin
| Category | Rank | Score | Count | |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| Coolness | 3 | 54 | ||
| Mood | 137 | 3.66 | ||
| Humor | 563 | 2.43 | ||
| Theme | 618 | 3.20 | ||
| Fun | 641 | 2.93 | ||
| Innovation | 648 | 2.93 | ||
| Overall | 825 | 2.91 | ||
| Graphics | 1122 | 2.22 |
At the begging I was just clicking not reading just because I wanna a read the final end (so lazy)! But after I realized it looped, I start reading. That was a special experience. It was bewitching.
Nice little story, but I feel that there's no need for two options as I get directed towards the "right" one anyway.
Nothing wrong with just clicking instead of having options that don't matter.
Other than that: Good job....
thanks, PaperBlurt. Although there are several ways to fail the main story (SPOILER! and the idea was the infinite loop /SPOILER!), I understand that I could have done a lot more, especially when experiencing interactive stories like yours.
As this is my very first Twine project, I guess I'll download your source and learn from it ;)
It is very linear, but that kind of worked for me. And the whole loop thing is pretty cool. Also it's an interesting use of the theme.
Oh, and nice use font effects and font variety -- something so many Twine games neglect.
This is a great story to turn into a Twine adventure, and I don't think it's that bad that you used it. That's creativity! The way you implemented the words as if he's losing his mind really do the trick. I feel weird now. Really weird.
Well, that was a great experience! It sounds like you've taken a lot from the original story, but converting it into interactive fiction format probably still took a lot of work. It felt a bit too much guided though - I guess that's the price you pay when you take a linear story as a source.
Thanks a lot for sharing this!
I think i'm going to like this.. As for rules - i think you should've put this into jam category and it would be totally fine.
you're right, I should have submitted this as a jam.
oh well, who cares, this won't win any prices anyway, I guess :) I made you read one of my favourite short stories, so my secret mission is accomplished!
Nice job, I explored all the paths, you made a nice work transforming the story into an interactive story game.
Fascinating story, nicely presented. :-)
That was deep, really liked the story
Good job!
Good job.
Nice story, the looping is in a fact a nice improvment to the story telling.
that was interesting!