enriranjan 2026-04-22 07:36
Good job! Congratulotions for your first finished project
Foon → Ludum Dare Explorer → LD59 → Mixed Signals
By cheldav
| Category | Rank | Score | Count | |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| Overall | 2.53 | 16 | ||
| Fun | 2.17 | 16 | ||
| Innovation | 2.17 | 16 | ||
| Theme | 2.60 | 16 | ||
| Humor | 2.15 | 15 | ||
| Mood | 2.32 | 16 |
Good job! Congratulotions for your first finished project
Great work finishing your project! It's definitely good to start with small finishable things and Twine is a nice way to practice putting together a game script/flow.
I know it's just meant to be a proof of concept, but one thought I had is that this might be stronger _without_ the descriptions of the three candidates at the beginning of the game. In a typical otome/romance game, the art tells you a lot about each LI (love interest) before you even meet them. But with Twine being only text, I think having to guess what the characters are about through the questions would really push your demo toward feeling like _gameplay_. In other words, make it a bit of a mystery. Sort of like Love Is Blind, I guess. At the end, reveal the characters and perhaps surprise the player with who they ended up liking most. :)
I always love me a dating sim and text-only games, so this is a very nice combination for me. Fun! I hadn't thought about it, but after reading it, I agree with Luumi's comment, one of my favorite things about stories/text-only games is the way they leave many things to the imagination. Also, altough it's just a personal preference of mine, something to think about is to perhaps not mention the contestant's gender, or alternatively allow the user to choose it (if Twine allows it and you don't rely entirely on this info for their responses). Realistically I was probably stuck with Mark but Layla seemed so cool... hahaha
@Enriranjan Thank you!! It was an incredibly satisfying experience and motivates me to attempt something slightly longer next time!
@Luumi Good insight, thank you! The article I spent the most time reading in preparation mostly focused on the way the game being discussed had decided on their art styles, so that's what I was thinking of with the descriptions, but I really like your suggestion about leaving the aesthetics to the player's imagination. I *LOVE* your idea about making it a mystery and I'll probably give that a shot in the future, so thank you very much!
@Zoldanka You are clearly my target audience with this one so I really appreciate your input! And I agree with you on the gender thing- I hesitated to include any sort of gendering since it felt limiting to the characters, but I ended up gendering the characters anyway since my brain was still caught up in writing descriptions. I'll definitely keep this in mind for my next project, thank you!
Congratulations on your first finished game! It’s also my first time attending a game jam—it’s been a lot of fun talking with other game creators. Have fun!
Congrats on finishing your first game! That’s a huge milestone. I liked that you created three distinct characters with different responses based on their personalities!
My main feedback would be about the presentation: adding some visual or audio cues would help to break up the long pages of text and make the experience more dynamic.
I loved the writing, never once did it bore me at any point and kept me intrigued throughout, I ended up liking aspects of all three people :D! Good work!
hello to a fellow Twine developer!
i think your game has a solid base! it was definitely intriguing to learn about the contestants.
few notes about the gameplay: - i would probably start with some shorter pieces of text (meaning contestants' descriptions) just to make the player get more immersed at first. like right now you don't know anything about the characters yet but you are expected to read their whole bios already. maybe they can answer some questions and you would learn some info through the dialogues? - at the beginning i was not sure who is answering the questions, them or me :D i would maybe state that so there was no option to get confused! - i believe it would be aswesome to have some extra challenge or criteria that would help you choose among the contestants. maybe you could define your own character first? or maybe there could be some situations that you discuss together? everyone is asked about their favorite movies , for example, you answer first and the characters give their answers after hearing yours. it would be really cool to have some communication and dynamic between the main hero and the characters!
overall i think it would be a nice dating sim :) wishing you all the best!