kddekadenz 2014-04-28 23:22
I wouldn't say that's a game, but a digital story with various branches to discover. Anyway, the story was ok, but missing some interesting twist to me.
I rather dislike the present tense for telling a story.
Foon → Ludum Dare Explorer → LD29 → A bot is sinking
By melondonut
| Category | Rank | Score | Count | |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| Mood | 260 | 3.30 | ||
| Innovation | 335 | 3.09 | ||
| Theme | 472 | 2.96 | ||
| Overall | 597 | 2.80 | ||
| Fun | 703 | 2.15 | ||
| Coolness | 1460 | 46 |
I wouldn't say that's a game, but a digital story with various branches to discover. Anyway, the story was ok, but missing some interesting twist to me.
I rather dislike the present tense for telling a story.
Interesting story. Good interface!
Thank you for telling this story. It was illuminating about the recent event.
I'm not the one to judge as I too have typos and grammatical errors in my Twines, but here they are a bit too many.
But I DO like twines that doesn't take place in a fantasy world or in space.
Keep it up!
thank your for your comments. I will correct the grammatical errors soon. :D
Yeah, a few too many grammatical errors, but I too am pleased to play a twine game that isn't fantastical. The subject matter was certainly interesting and well-dealt-with, but the prose felt a bit plane.
*plain
A really interesting take on the theme and relevant to recent events! Story was well told too!
I know my writing is poor. ;( I have to study English a lot more. Thank you for playing and comments!
Nice job, very unique and interesting story.
interesting idea!
Thanks for playing :D good to hear that!
It's a good history. Maybe later you can add some images.
thanks for your comment :D I will consider it
Okay Pretty good work for being a text based game , WELL DONE.... CHECK OUT MY GAME
I've been following this on the news, It was cool seeing your prospective on the matter.
Thank you all! phew. there are still missing people.. about 10. It was just a disaster by human-error.
some nice writing but no assets, no clear writing style or characters
Not a bad game just wish you gave the entry a name. Would of been nice if you had some kind sounds.
The different versions were interesting in revealing what actually happened.
It felt like the story needed more branches to me, but otherwise interesting.
@wschorn yup. I admit it. I tried to make it really dried.
and actually there are many episodes regarding this accident so I could make some characters. but I was afraid that I would hurt the families of missing people if they play my game. ....I didn't want to make any unreal character, nor characters based on real people.
@Clinthoney yea it was really strange. I definitely put the title, but somehow it changed to jam entry. now I fixed it. thx for advice.
@aeveis Thanks!
@Acuity yea I made little branched on purpose. I just wanted to let the truth known. I know what you exactly mean.. thank you. :D