The Fountain At The City's End

panda 2018-08-14 14:33

The game doesn't load for me (Firefox, MacOS), I just see a black screen when I press "Run game".

wrenpirate 2018-08-15 20:59

I'm running Firefox on a Mac, and it ran fine. (No shade, just my experience.) I got frustrated that there were so many screens of text before I had any agency. After a brief moment of agency, then it seemed my only options were to continue or quit. I missed the part where the safeword was established, so it seemed not an actual safeword but a regular communication to quit. (That's ethics, not a problem with game play.) I appreciate that you created an elaborate world and moved forward with intention.

adhesion 2018-08-21 03:20

I've heard of The Shape of Water before but this is ridiculous! :stuck_out_tongue_winking_eye: Seriously though this was pretty good. Solid writing despite some pronoun inconsistencies and typos. Would have liked some more meaningful choices but it was still an interesting experience, the evocative world building at the beginning set the stage well. Creative use of the theme too. Nice work!

deathray 2018-08-21 04:01

:thinking: A very unique tale... But as WrenPirate said I wish there were more choices to keep me engaged; needs more interactivity to go along with the fiction.

sleeplessdev 2018-08-21 04:18

It was interesting idea, the story was pretty well written so good job on that. But there isn't many interactive bits and I easily lost interest.

wolfrug 2018-08-21 08:19

Well of course the theme would work for a porn game xD Didn't even think of that. Nicely written, not a lot of choices but I don't think that was ever the point was it? World-building is on-point, and you even almost-manage to make it more than just the porn. My critical opinion is that you should've wrapped it up more towards the end, given us a few more insights into why the world is the way it is, who Resonance is vis-a-vis Fountain, and maybe tried to add...you know...something. I know that porn games don't have to follow the same rules as regular storytelling, but what this lacks the most (imho) is that moment of development (character/world/plot). What was Resonance looking for, did she find it with Fountain, and why did she leave at the end if she did/didn't etc. Maybe some of the other paths gave more of that (I went full-on submission).

Another thing is that there are some typos here and there, albeit easy enough to fix. Nice work!

cristihkj 2018-08-22 07:37

Great game! Very cool and interesting! :D

velocity7 2018-08-22 10:27

I liked the concept of your game. Good Job