vincent89 2023-10-03 12:23
I liked the atmosphere of the game, the graphics and the music are very nice!!
Foon → Ludum Dare Explorer → LD54 → The Death Wrapped By Feathers
By egggrass
| Category | Rank | Score | Count | |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| Overall | 632 | 3.50 | 17 | |
| Fun | 2.89 | 16 | ||
| Innovation | 3.11 | 15 | ||
| Theme | 757 | 3.35 | 19 | |
| Graphics | 322 | 4.02 | 20 | |
| Humor | 2.50 | 12 | ||
| Mood | 49 | 4.26 | 19 |
I liked the atmosphere of the game, the graphics and the music are very nice!!
The mood was "good".
It felt like English is not your mother tongue (but I may be wrong) and the phrasing was a bit weird, which somehow added to the atmosphere (something can be better than the sum of its parts). The slashes ( / ) in the text felt weird, especially in one of the screen where it was supposed (I guess) to separate sentences (or groups of words), but I instead read it as an option between two words. For example: "something/something something/something" reads to me as "something/something" "something/something" instead of "something" "something something" "something".
The ambiance reminded me a little of Baudelaire's "Les fleurs du mal".
@thebmxeur lol you are right, I am not native speaker~ I'll try improve the expression later. I use slashes instead of comma to avoid a technical problem when reading the csv format text in Unity. Still unfamiliar with c# now, sorry for making you confused.. Thank you for the advice and recommendation, "Les fleurs du mal" added to my reading list<3
@vincent89 Thank you~~the background music is from https://slip.stream
Great story, calming like a short story. It quickly made me think of The Last Leaf. The music fits well. I personally hope for improved story presentation to make the game more fun.(*^▽^*)
- totally my dream job, since I would like to be called "THE DEATH" as well and stare at old man's face - really good mood though - I assume the "/" problem mentioned above is that you are using fullwidth comma instead of halfwidth comma ("，" and ","), should be a quick fix if you can ctrl+F your excel sheet and replace those slashes - all in all good job!!
I do not know what to think. I had difficulty because English is not my native language and I am weak at it. But we don't have many options here, just the occasional dialogue choice and some falling feathers. The music is ambient and not original, but it matched the mood. I don't know, I don't think it fits the theme. But I like the art, even though it's all very static.
@foursay aww yes!!always find old(very old) man's face mysterious and attractive Stuck in this problem for long time, even switched to another pc - -|| Thank you sooooo much!!
@lincolnsalles haha me not native speaker either!Language barrier is always an eternal problem, especially for a narrative-oriented work~Find it difficult when trying to depict subtle sentiments. True, quite limited gameply, basically only throwing feathers... The "limited space" concept is applied when shaping the situation of the dying man, both mentally and physically(I hope so), not straightforward and not well expressed lol Thank you for the detailed feedback!!!appreciate that~~
视觉看起来太酷了
I really liked the story!! also, the visuals were stunning, I really love your style.
On a more technical side, I'd look into random pitch variation for repeating sound effects, like the crow squaks, so they're less grating over time. Also, you mentioned that you used slashes"/" to replace commas"," because you're not very familiar with csv and file parsing, so definitely look into that. Also just because slashes can be used effectively in writing, and it's a shame to use them non-purposefully!
@bucharlardy 谢谢！开心！ （你们的视觉第一酷
@snekofspice Haven't thought about this! Yes, it will definitely be more interesting to have random sound effects. I also found the crow really annoying when testing...Very helpful suggestion!
It is a pity for not ultilizing slashes as a part of expression, you remind me of how delicately it is used in poem. I'll think about this when rewrite the dialogue. Thank youuu SnekOfSpice!!><
Amazing art style! The overall atmosphere of the game is very attractive!
游戏的氛围很有感染力，视觉冲击也很强，太帅了！！！
@dsk 感谢！你们的设计才是让人眼前一亮啊，我们是酷酷联盟！
Artsy and atmospheric but not much game here, essentially just a click through dialogue... I'm likely not the target audience but even a few simple things, like clicking the crow to make him leave, or dragging and dropping feathers down onto the scene would add more of the interactivity to it. Some minor camera movement based on mouse position would add a lot too; make it feel like you're in the space with them instead of simply looking at a picture.
@mitch-miller Very insipring!True it is actually a visual novel with little interactions now...I am considering rebuilding a 3d project instead, which may provide more immersive experience. The interaction with crow/feathers is undoubtedly a good point to add, thank you so much Miller!!!