paperblurt 2014-08-25 09:57
I like all the small features as the fading text, nice work with Twine.
Maybe some air between the lines?
Nice going...
Foon → Ludum Dare Explorer → LD30 → IGT
By cdf121
| Category | Rank | Score | Count | |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| Theme | 385 | 3.47 | ||
| Overall | 985 | 2.75 | ||
| Innovation | 1119 | 2.18 | ||
| Fun | 1187 | 1.87 | ||
| Coolness | 1796 | 30 |
I like all the small features as the fading text, nice work with Twine.
Maybe some air between the lines?
Nice going...
There wasn't really much choices. This probably would have worked better as a short story instead of a game. I also don't see why there is a need for so many short passages instead of fewer longer ones when I'm not being given any option to move away from the main line anyway.
However I did like how you worked the theme into the game, since some other Twine games haven't done it so well.
I like the use of theme and it's pretty well written and engaging. But it would be better if the music didn't restart with each new passage, and it could have done with greater interaction -- not necessarily more choices though, if that at all makes sense, just more opportunities for the player to indulge their obsessive urge to click things.
Interesting take on the subject. It's a nice story, and I enjoyed kicking back and getting taken through the story. It is a bit frustrating that the music restarts after every choice though.
Enjoyable story. Good use of the theme :)
Although more of a story than a game, It was great fun and the fading text made it unveil more
Really nice story; I don't normally enjoy linear IF but this really grabbed me.
The audio has thrown me off for two reasons - although I love the tune, it gets a bit annoying when it restarts every click (although I'm guessing that the framework you're using makes the problem less trivial than it sounds); and the other reason is that it is taken from the interwebs. I think that means that this would technically have to be classed as a Jam entry, but I like this so I'll keep quiet. ;)
Oh cool, I made a Twine game too!
I agree that it'd be better if the music didn't restart with every passage and there were some grammar errors, but the story/game itself was pretty cool! Nice work especially for 48 hours!
Interesting idea, a direction few take. I felt like it could use a bit more interaction.