Played the game, i think i get what you are trying to do, but the execution of it is off. Its not really in the core mechanics though, those are fine. Its with the language used. So I don't know if you have any greater ambitions for this project post Ludum dare, but you really need to watch the wording.
There is an old saying that "brevity is the soul of wit." In English the inverse is also true: "long-windedness is the soul of tragedy." The language and dialogue here is too blunt, too sharp, and too direct. It comes across as a dark comedy. I would strongly advise reworking the dialogue and script. Be more circumspect, and LESS willing to engage with the subject material. More euphemisms and unspoken context, and less "You are useless today."
LD47 — Stuck in a loop (2)
Suicidal Boyfriend by Federico Giorgi 2020-10-12T02:04:01Z ♥ 3
Played the game, i think i get what you are trying to do, but the execution of it is off. Its not really in the core mechanics though, those are fine. Its with the language used. So I don't know if you have any greater ambitions for this project post Ludum dare, but you really need to watch the wording.
There is an old saying that "brevity is the soul of wit." In English the inverse is also true: "long-windedness is the soul of tragedy." The language and dialogue here is too blunt, too sharp, and too direct. It comes across as a dark comedy. I would strongly advise reworking the dialogue and script. Be more circumspect, and LESS willing to engage with the subject material. More euphemisms and unspoken context, and less "You are useless today."
Best of luck with your future projects.
proceed by anchorlight 2020-10-06T00:19:29Z ♥ 0
Really interesting project.
Great music!
Interesting visuals!
Fascinating concept!
Fantastic Ambiance!
Gameplay.
Really solid dialogue!
Pretty good project. I look forward to seeing more.