mantis 2015-08-25 13:30
Quite a cool idea, nice writing!
Foon → Ludum Dare Explorer → LD33 → The Chocolate Effect
| Category | Rank | Score | Count | |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| Coolness | 2355 |
Quite a cool idea, nice writing!
I always find it difficult to judge interactive stories like this. As a game, it's very interesting; the branching is well thought out, and it's interesting to see all the possible outcomes. I have based my ratings on how the game works as a game.
As a story, I see more flaws. The characters feel generic and boring, and the narrative never made me truly care about them. The writing is sometimes a little too stiff and formulaic, especially in how it describes conversations (see also http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/SaidBookism). There's also a bunch of typos, spelling mistakes and similar minor errors that screw up the immersion. Still, the plot was interesting enough to follow all possible paths (I think - it's impossible to get a perfect score on the advanced test, isn't it?), so it's not bad - it just could be better in a lot of ways.
Nice little text adventure. However, it seems so depressing for a game :( But I suppose to the themes effect that this is a good thing.
I like how missing the review session turns the test into the advanced test.