grooveman 2016-04-19 21:50
I was unsure how I felt until I saw a dragon in a top hat, which made me laugh way harder than I had expected. AMAZING CHOICE.
Your sense of absurd humour is good, but I think the writing could flow a little better (a little bit of proofreading helps a lot!). Having your characters on screen emote a bit more can also do wonders in making the story easier to follow and breathe a little more life into them.